non fiction analysis on ‘The Nation under a Shroud’

The nation under a shrew is a formal piece of writing and we can tell this because it is full of facts and informative writing. The use of these statistical facts is used for example from ‘the US has started using B-2 stealth bombers’ this is telling us what is being said. There are no personal pronouns used which makes this a very impersonal piece of writing. This is also very formal because of the vocabulary that is used for example ‘conflagration’ which means a destructive fire that could threaten life on earth. So to conclude this writing is a formal piece and impersonal and very factual.

5 things to improve my writing and 5 most important things

Things to help my writing:

1: Read more to get a better vocab

2: Vary sentence length for effect

3:Personalise writing with anecdotes

4:Use analytical verbs and phrases

5: Use what who and how in my writing

5 most important things:

1: Reading lots of different things

2: expand noun phrases to add interest

3: Be able to shift between formal and informal language

4: Use punctuation naturally and regularly

5: Be able to analyse a text using analytical phrases

Rafa Benitez and his time at Chelsea from my view

Rafa Benitez came to the club at a very difficult time for the club. I knew straight away that this would be a very tough time for him and that is for two reasons, first he was a very successful manger under Liverpool who are a rival of Chelsea’s and secondly the fans all loved Di Matteo and he came in for him so there was always going to be difficulties for Rafa. However I do not think that he has done that bad a job for Chelsea because he has achieved Chelsea’s main goal for the season which is to qualify for the Champions league and also on top of that he has won a major trophy with them. I think also he has done a good job to make the fans accept him because of the results he has been getting for the team. I think that if the fans did not dislike him so much he would have a future at chelsea

Formal Vs Informal language and Opinion Vs Fact

I  will start by analysing text ‘e’. I think that this has been written in a formal language and I have gathered this thought from the fact that words have been used such as ‘advocate’ and ‘voluptuous’   which gives the text a much more formal feel. There are not any personal pronouns which makes it more impersonal. I also gather that this text is fact because once again there are not any personal pronouns which makes us know that this is not his own opinion and having no personal pronouns makes us feel that this is a more actual text.

Secondly I will look at text ‘k’. There is a colloquial tone being used which comes across very chatty and makes the piece feel very informal. There are also impersonal pronouns which introduce an informal piece of text again.

What I need to do to improve my writing

I think that I am pretty good at most aspects of my writing but the thing that I think I need to work on most in my writing is two things. Firstly the vocabulary and phrases that I use in my writing need to be more original and need to make more of an impact on what I am writing. Secondly I need to work on my punctuation especially my commas and where I need to use them for my sentence to make sense.