Recently I have started reading the Hunger Games series as most of my friends have read it and have said how great a book it is so I decided to give it a try and I have really enjoyed the first book. Now I am moving forward onto the second book and really hoping for it to be as good as the first.
The bright and vibrant colours of the text will immediately make a strong visual impact on the readers and will entice them to go out and buy the four different coloured tubes of Lypsyl. The use of the girls of the same age of the teenage girls reading this is very effective as it represents the joy of the possible future for some lucky girls who buy these tubes of Lypsyl and win the jackpot prize.
The advertisement is structured in a clear concise manner which makes the article easily digestible and provides and eye catching representation of the main article. The important parts of the article such as a VIP weekend and the 20 percent off coupon which will also make the girls want the buy the Lypsyl as it not only reduces price but also allows you the chance to win the competition.
The choice of font size is very effective because the things that the magazine do not want you to see are in the smaller fonts and the things in the big font are the eye catching positives of what Lypsyl will bring you.
Therefore overall I think that the magazine is very cheesy but the cheesiness is what draws in the people who read the magazine.
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Harry Curtis |
There was no spelling mistakes, however the line ‘The use of the girls of the same age of the teenage girls’ is hard to comprehend. It was very creative and cleverly written. He went into a lot of detail therefore he discovered many devices that are hard to spot without taking a long hard look.It was very creative and cleverly written. He went into a lot of detail therefore he discovered many devices that are hard to spot without taking a long hard look. He was detailed when discussing how the reader can be attracted to the advert and how the advert uses certain devices to exploit the teenagers weaknesses, for example their love of shopping. The use of the girls of the same age of the teenage girls’ is hard to comprehend. A |
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Claudia Papke |
All of his spelling was correct and as was his punctuation, he used a few slang words but they were still correctly spelt. I do think it stood out from others that I read as he uses more teenage terms in some cases which links to the magazine but he then justifies the “cheesy terms” with a complexed discussion. In one phrase he used the same two words “of the” three times in one sentence. Even though only a few presentational devices were spotted, he discussed them in depth and gave a wide variety of in-depth justifications. Yes, all of his phrases made sense however, In one phrase he used the same two words “of the” three times in one sentence. A- |
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Lizzie Borg |
Over all the spelling and punctuation was clear and correct in this piece of work, and it was clearly portrayed in 4 paragraphs. I think it was quite creative and original but can be more. He needs to be able to expand more on his sentences. Ben did spot the presentational devices and wrote the effect about them, but he just needs to expand more on them and write about the target audience. Some of the phrases just didnt make sense as he used the two words ‘of the’ 3 times in one sentence therefore leading in a lot of it not making sense. B |
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